Have I mentioned how much I hate these things? If not, then let me reassure you that I'd rather change poopy diapers for the rest of my life than write one of these things! I thought I had a pretty good one for Songbird, I even made it through the first round of the Amazon contest, but not a single request for even a partial. I had more luck with my crappy query for The Evolution of Janie!
Where does that leave me? Writing a new one. So, here it is (so far!):
Dear (insert name)
I read on your blog that you are interested in young adult romance and thought that my novel SONGBIRD might interest you. Complete at 63,000 words, SONGBIRD is a Young Adult romance novel told through a combination of present and past events.
Seventeen year-old Dani Mays is living parallel life experiences, or so it seems when the slightest word or action reminds her of events from her childhood. Not necessarily a bad thing, if they were those bittersweet ones that made you long to be a child again. Problem is, Dani’s memories center around her older brother Jace and the day she witnessed her father murder him.
Dani finally has a stable life with a foster family and a best friend, Reece McCabe. Then Reece does the unthinkable, he proves he’s less than perfect and even the love she has for him can’t stop her from using the past to protect herself. As Dani struggles to hold herself together, threatening phone calls from a long forgotten person endanger keep her looking back to her childhood for answers and endangering those she loves the most. Ultimately, the pain of losing Reece may just be the one thing that can transcend her love for Jace and give her the power to put her past to rest.
Thank you for your time. I have included the first five pages for your consideration. I look forward to hearing from you soon.
Sincerely,
Angela Fristoe
On my iPod:
She's the One by Robbie Williams
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Wednesday, April 28, 2010
Sunday, March 14, 2010
First draft of query for Liar
I thought I'd post this here, mainly to give myself the encouragement to continue working on it. This is my first draft of the query for The Gifted: Liar.
Lies. Everyone tells them and at seventeen, Phoebe Maddock was never very good at telling when someone was lying. It’s supposed to be her gift. Her sisters, Chloe and Lily have been using their gifts since birth. But for Phoebe it just never happened. Then her best friend, Tonya tells a fib so small it seems inconsequential. Even if Phoebe had managed to ignored the severe cramps, there was no way she could pretend she didn’t hear the whisper of Liar in her head.
That’s when things get complicated. Sure, it’s nice knowing that her crush is hot for her and it’s even nicer knowing that her dead mother did love her, but when Tonya’s lies continue, Phoebe begins to suspect that her friend is hiding something far worse than a date with a guy she met on line. But in lies, intention is everything and Tonya’s lies are a cry for help that Phoebe can’t ignore.
The Gifted: Liar (Paranormal YA, 70,000 words) is the first novel in a trilogy following the Maddock sisters.
On my iPod:
36-24-36 by Violent Femmes
Lies. Everyone tells them and at seventeen, Phoebe Maddock was never very good at telling when someone was lying. It’s supposed to be her gift. Her sisters, Chloe and Lily have been using their gifts since birth. But for Phoebe it just never happened. Then her best friend, Tonya tells a fib so small it seems inconsequential. Even if Phoebe had managed to ignored the severe cramps, there was no way she could pretend she didn’t hear the whisper of Liar in her head.
That’s when things get complicated. Sure, it’s nice knowing that her crush is hot for her and it’s even nicer knowing that her dead mother did love her, but when Tonya’s lies continue, Phoebe begins to suspect that her friend is hiding something far worse than a date with a guy she met on line. But in lies, intention is everything and Tonya’s lies are a cry for help that Phoebe can’t ignore.
The Gifted: Liar (Paranormal YA, 70,000 words) is the first novel in a trilogy following the Maddock sisters.
On my iPod:
36-24-36 by Violent Femmes
Friday, February 26, 2010
Amazon Breakthrough Novel Award
I made the first round of cuts! Whoo! I didn't even realize how anxious I was until I woke up yesterday morning expecting the results. When they didn't show and no email came I started thinking I hadn't made it. The only thing that kept my same flame of hope alive was that there didn't seem to be anyone who'd received an email. After ten hours of constant check the list was finally up. I think I opened the file about ten times before I actually believed it was my name and my book title. Together.
The first round was the pitch round. I made it so I know my premise isn't crap and that essentially my query isn't crap either, although I have improved on it since submitting my pitch. Being rejected in round one just means you need to work on your pitch, find a way to distinguish it form the rest of the pack. I was kind of hoping to be eliminated in round one, that way I could tell myself that it's just my pitch they don't like.
Going into this second round, I'm scared to face the reviews of people I don't know, who I haven't established a writing relationship with. It's a month until the next elimination and I'm determined to put the contest to the side. To not worry about what the reviewers will say or whether I make it or not. But for now, I'm going to basking in the glory of having made it through round one! :)
On my iPod:
I'm in Love with a Girl by Gavin DeGraw
The first round was the pitch round. I made it so I know my premise isn't crap and that essentially my query isn't crap either, although I have improved on it since submitting my pitch. Being rejected in round one just means you need to work on your pitch, find a way to distinguish it form the rest of the pack. I was kind of hoping to be eliminated in round one, that way I could tell myself that it's just my pitch they don't like.
Going into this second round, I'm scared to face the reviews of people I don't know, who I haven't established a writing relationship with. It's a month until the next elimination and I'm determined to put the contest to the side. To not worry about what the reviewers will say or whether I make it or not. But for now, I'm going to basking in the glory of having made it through round one! :)
On my iPod:
I'm in Love with a Girl by Gavin DeGraw
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